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posted 2009.07.04 at 18:10

To make everything fit reasonably, I did the first thing that came to mind - kept the doc's background the original size and cropped the right side, then scaled the doc down to fit. There ought to be enough dialogue to make it work. I write this bit with the scene rewritten but without the type laid down - given how wordy the rewrite has become I figure the more space for dialogue, the better.

After laying in type, I'm glad things went that route - all that space-creating and it's STILL cramped. Good thing the story gets a lot more monosyllabic in future chapters.

First Edition Metadata

OPD : 2004.11.17 @ 00:41

20070731 : Revised for continuity. Previous version here.

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DOOM.

Finally, a page I'm reasonably happy with.

As usual, I get the look I want locked in right on the verge of an aesthetics shift. There's a lot of convergance between dialogue and background elements, but hey - no typos. Three for three according to Xeno.

Oh, and the cast has been updated. Everyone from recon and everyone to date from suction. :D