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posted 2009.07.04 at 18:16

The biggest adjustment here is that Dyluck's actually having a conversation with Murnau. Not a very deep one, but it's still a two-way interchange.

In the original re-drafts, Dyluck's words were still outside in white, a la Thad's monologues in previous scenes. I finally went with black in-panel (despite how that alters the last page of the scene) for consistency - it matches with how Murnau 'hears' Rayne and Greymalkin previously, and by sticking Murnau's few lines on the outside in white, the overall feel keeps with the established use of type in the story.

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OPD : 2004.11.23 @ 22:49

Done with the wangfish. Back to the old standby : boobies and blood. Much like the rest of this scene, Courier text inside the panels is relevant - but if you can't read it, don't worry about it. If you can't get the gist of this sequence from the visuals, I'm doing it wrong.

Also. Eight pages in eleven days.

19:57 <@xeno> you're going to give yourself, or ATC, an aneurism
19:57 <@xeno> slow down